tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post3259619193632000145..comments2023-11-05T01:15:43.435-07:00Comments on Smith 9H 07-08: Persuasive Poemanneshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00573450327737964454noreply@blogger.comBlogger64125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-20451572322265040282008-03-17T21:35:00.001-06:002008-03-17T21:35:00.001-06:00This comment has been removed by the author.stephenfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09186643559014663553noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-566853139440139592008-03-17T21:35:00.000-06:002008-03-17T21:35:00.000-06:00All right. Parker is awesome. He found a place tha...All right. Parker is awesome. He found a place that rhymes with orange. Do you guys feel that you have incorperated some of the senses from AWNM? I know that empathy is one very important piece to understanding poetry.stephenfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09186643559014663553noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-634387828910697022008-03-17T20:54:00.000-06:002008-03-17T20:54:00.000-06:00These poems were tough, but I think they turned ou...These poems were tough, but I think they turned out fabulously. I liked the poems about driving, I remember having to beg my parents to allow me to drive. Great job!mattfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06638278517765346046noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-26210816288408045302008-03-17T20:28:00.000-06:002008-03-17T20:28:00.000-06:00josed, I really liked your poem too! I would be to...josed, I really liked your poem too! I would be totally convince if I heard that argument.<BR/><BR/><BR/>Alexf, I can really relate to your poem. it was very well written!leslielhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10389957516533398675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-64645415313389258152008-03-17T20:25:00.000-06:002008-03-17T20:25:00.000-06:00These were all so funny to read. A lot of them wer...These were all so funny to read. A lot of them were from a child's perspective since children beg a lot. A great example of this is Nile's poem. It is really simple and has an arguement that shows the simplicity of a child's persuasive skills. I also liked Amanda's because it tells a story and displays a love for her cousin. Good job everyone!jordanhhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12300095942426752031noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-7876708145023625702008-03-17T18:00:00.000-06:002008-03-17T18:00:00.000-06:00Jose- I really like your poem! It isn't at all wha...Jose- I really like your poem! It isn't at all what I expected from you and it's really well written!Alyssa S.https://www.blogger.com/profile/17614265323422087457noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-10549310984819439892008-03-17T17:45:00.000-06:002008-03-17T17:45:00.000-06:00Ha ha, I liked your's Clara! Parents definitely ac...Ha ha, I liked your's Clara! Parents definitely act like that when it comes to letting their kids drive.maddiefhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07104501383552001025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-16249524448310494042008-03-16T15:58:00.000-06:002008-03-16T15:58:00.000-06:00Now, now mother, its only one night,I'll only be u...Now, now mother, its only one night,<BR/>I'll only be until 11, everything will be alright<BR/>We're not doing anything illegal!<BR/>Just hitting the beach, looking at the seagulls.<BR/>I finished my homework, its all done,<BR/>Now, now mother, just let me go out and have fun!<BR/><BR/>Next week we are leaving town,<BR/>I don't want to have to depart with a frown...<BR/>You have known my friends forever,<BR/>And them get into trouble? NEVER!<BR/>I promise that we wont talk to strangers, <BR/>Now, now mother, just let me stay out later!MollyShttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08444768120063775918noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-21125028472906903202008-03-15T13:46:00.000-06:002008-03-15T13:46:00.000-06:00Come on, give a girl a break!An F does not a happy...Come on, give a girl a break!<BR/>An F does not a happy person make.<BR/>Maybe if I try to work hard<BR/>Then you'll change my scorecard.<BR/>I will try my very best<BR/>And I mean this from the bottom <BR/>Of my heart in my chest.<BR/>Will you let me get a good grade?Liaphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05054355520677323189noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-85285810455540482232008-03-12T21:42:00.000-06:002008-03-12T21:42:00.000-06:00Compensation by ConfirmationAll I do is give, give...Compensation by Confirmation<BR/><BR/>All I do is give, give, give<BR/>Don't I deseve conpensation?<BR/><BR/>I play guitar here thrice in four weeks<BR/>I am lector six times a year<BR/>I want compensation by confirmation,<BR/>But I suppose that you are too meek<BR/><BR/>All I do is live, live, live<BR/>Without a confirmation<BR/><BR/>Have I not proven my alleigence to the church?<BR/>By always carrying the alter boy torch<BR/><BR/>The least you could do is confirm my faith,<BR/>But all you do is wait, wait, waitjordanhhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12300095942426752031noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-32864665385346283472008-03-12T21:28:00.000-06:002008-03-12T21:28:00.000-06:00This poem is lateoh how I do hatewhen it is my fat...This poem is late<BR/>oh how I do hate<BR/>when it is my fate <BR/>to turn in things late<BR/><BR/>Please don't berate<BR/>my poor turn in rate<BR/>it will sorely affect my <BR/>emotional state<BR/><BR/>Give me more than an eight<BR/>And don't get irate<BR/>I'm sure we'll debate<BR/>this poem that's lateSelenamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05856663154059119541noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-34574684936303017772008-03-12T12:54:00.000-06:002008-03-12T12:54:00.000-06:00This comment has been removed by the author.Tylerg!https://www.blogger.com/profile/04091312202700002471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-70987388714536911522008-03-12T12:52:00.000-06:002008-03-12T12:52:00.000-06:00This comment has been removed by the author.Tylerg!https://www.blogger.com/profile/04091312202700002471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-82860531210375388002008-03-12T12:39:00.000-06:002008-03-12T12:39:00.000-06:00This comment has been removed by the author.Tylerg!https://www.blogger.com/profile/04091312202700002471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-54388151465096791152008-03-11T22:01:00.000-06:002008-03-11T22:01:00.000-06:00Mom pleaseI didn’t know what time it wasI tried to...Mom please<BR/>I didn’t know what time it was<BR/>I tried to get home on time<BR/>But at the movies there was a long line<BR/>I’m sorry I didn’t watch the clock<BR/>I really wish you would let me go <BR/>And I am feeling really low<BR/>Next time I will think of the rules you have founded<BR/>So I wont be so frequently be groundedalexdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11165995540954635434noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-69951699268205315972008-03-11T21:00:00.000-06:002008-03-11T21:00:00.000-06:00(Sorry this is late, I thought this poem was due W...(Sorry this is late, I thought this poem was due Wednesday.)<BR/> <BR/>An Untimely Interruption <BR/><BR/>I would have had this poem in I swear,<BR/>If I didn’t witness an occasion ever so rare.<BR/>You see it was deep into Saturday night,<BR/>When I awoke to the most unusual sight.<BR/><BR/>Before me stood a man of four foot three,<BR/>With beady little eyes that stared at me.<BR/>He waddled on over towards my bed,<BR/>And took a breath before he said,<BR/><BR/>“I hail from a planet of dust and delay, the planet Bluesray.<BR/>So, you had better turn that poem in no earlier than Tuesday.<BR/>For if you find this assignment is one your must do,<BR/>Earth shall cease to exist, or least as be no more than greenish blue goo.”<BR/><BR/>Then with a POP he was gone,<BR/>And next thing I knew it was dawn.<BR/>Confused and frightened, I headed to breakfast,<BR/>Afraid any moment I’d witness our world turn into mist.<BR/><BR/>Weighted with the fate of the Earth,<BR/>I couldn’t turn the poem in; I’ve lived here since birth.<BR/>So reluctantly I did the only thing I could,<BR/>Turn it in late like people on Bluesray would.<BR/><BR/>So most clearly you see,<BR/>You must let me be home free,<BR/>An A is all I need,<BR/>For you and I would be mush without my noble deed.catemhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04089144759362588600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-21617465685562668592008-03-11T20:45:00.000-06:002008-03-11T20:45:00.000-06:00This comment has been removed by the author.catemhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04089144759362588600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-31468334143166665562008-03-11T19:02:00.000-06:002008-03-11T19:02:00.000-06:00Officer, please,I know it's the law,But please jus...Officer, please,<BR/>I know it's the law,<BR/>But please just let me free,<BR/>I am just in awe,<BR/>Because in know I'm not guilty.<BR/><BR/>So please just let me off with a warning,<BR/>I know next time I'll click it, <BR/>before you give me a ticket.mitchl.https://www.blogger.com/profile/13126168148470921152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-20146234761536178682008-03-11T17:10:00.000-06:002008-03-11T17:10:00.000-06:00You know you love us.All we want is some money.To ...You know you love us.<BR/>All we want is some money.<BR/><BR/>To buy lunch<BR/>No need for any sort of hunch.<BR/><BR/>It's just a few dollars<BR/>A few dollars for your scholars.<BR/><BR/>You are the best mom ever!<BR/>I will not bug you, never!<BR/><BR/>I love you so dearly<BR/>Especially if you'll give it to me.<BR/><BR/>Just hand it over<BR/>I won't give it to anyone, not even Rover.<BR/><BR/>For you see, you're everyone's favorite, mom.<BR/>Just hand over the money to me and to Tom.meganuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11445318662961125308noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-18110500643712301662008-03-11T16:29:00.000-06:002008-03-11T16:29:00.000-06:00Won't you eat that awesome orange?People like it o...Won't you eat that awesome orange?<BR/>People like it out in Blorenge.<BR/>It is always good for you,<BR/>and it gives you vitamins too.<BR/><BR/>I know the color may seem strange,<BR/>but color doesn't matter, now does it James?<BR/>So please eat up, swallow it down,<BR/>and no one will run you out of town.ParkerHhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00768507795445854018noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-46435046349035184592008-03-10T21:25:00.000-06:002008-03-10T21:25:00.000-06:00I simple ask "Why not?"but you hold you ground"but...I simple ask "Why not?"<BR/>but you hold you ground<BR/>"but she got one more than i got"<BR/>but you stand sound<BR/><BR/>oh please give me a cookie<BR/>I beg on my knee<BR/>in this game i am a rookie<BR/>but this cookie is calling me<BR/><BR/>I understand its before dinner<BR/>and its not the time<BR/>with this cookie I'd be a winner<BR/>but for now i beg and whinenilechttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05633304626429688732noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-1815306152926687182008-03-10T17:45:00.000-06:002008-03-10T17:45:00.000-06:00(Ha ha ha, I was quite tired!!)The closing of my e...(Ha ha ha, I was quite tired!!)<BR/><BR/>The closing of my eyes,<BR/>The bobbing of my head,<BR/>I can’t take it any longer,<BR/>Just let me go to bed.<BR/><BR/>My homework is complete,<BR/>The books have all been read,<BR/>All is as it should be,<BR/>Just let me go to bed.<BR/><BR/>I’ve been awake the whole day,<BR/>My energy has been spread,<BR/>I won’t fall over if,<BR/>You let me go to bed.<BR/><BR/>I can’t stay up any later,<BR/>I’ll sleep right here instead,<BR/>It all would just be better,<BR/>If you let me go to bed.<BR/><BR/>I want to go to sleep,<BR/>For tomorrow I will dread,<BR/>But for now just allow me,<BR/>Please let me go to bed!alexfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00945327406690770767noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-20985403029612881942008-03-09T22:23:00.000-06:002008-03-09T22:23:00.000-06:00Harsher words never spoken,Thoughts and ideas neve...Harsher words never spoken,<BR/>Thoughts and ideas never whispered,<BR/>Hugs long gone and<BR/>kisses never had.<BR/><BR/>A time alone, <BR/>A time together<BR/>A time without end<BR/>Why did you leave me standing there, <BR/>why couldn't you show care.<BR/><BR/>Life may seem fleeting, time is all we have.<BR/>Time to be together, <BR/>Time to be a friend.<BR/><BR/>Dreams come and go, flowing with the river.<BR/>Flow, flow, flow<BR/>There they go lost in memory<BR/>When they flow into the sea <BR/>Will you still remember me? <BR/>I'll take you back no matter what<BR/>though you seem lost and dazed<BR/>I'll still be here my arms are open<BR/><BR/>Harsher words never spoken<BR/>thoughts and ideas never whispered,<BR/>Hugs long gone and<BR/>kisses never had.<BR/><BR/>Where will I be without you,<BR/>Then long last make my stand<BR/><BR/>For time alone can not break love <BR/>Death itself will only pass by <BR/>Time itself will freeze in place <BR/>For you and for me<BR/><BR/>Sweeter dreams and happy days<BR/>For time has traveled on <BR/>Leaving me dusty memories on the shelf<BR/>To remember our true lovestephenfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09186643559014663553noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-15415508822782856202008-03-09T21:28:00.000-06:002008-03-09T21:28:00.000-06:00Harsh words thrown like knivesTearing you two apar...Harsh words thrown like knives<BR/>Tearing you two apart<BR/>To go separate ways, to live your own lives<BR/>To leave one another, to get a new start<BR/>You each badmouth the other behind their back<BR/>You say you don’t mean to make others feel poor<BR/>But compassion is something that both of you lack<BR/>So people sit back and try to endure<BR/>You each want me to follow you into your new being<BR/>To be part of one and stay out of the other<BR/>I liked it better when everyone was agreeing<BR/>Why do you come up with one lie then another?<BR/>Do you not understand that you’re tearing me in two? <BR/>One half for you and one half for him<BR/>What can I say to get through to you?<BR/>Just know in my eyes tears are always on the brimLouisebhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06329023374851321655noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4053873056775658406.post-32635614385260424142008-03-09T21:24:00.000-06:002008-03-09T21:24:00.000-06:00Let me go just this onceI'll never get to goin my ...Let me go just this once<BR/>I'll never get to go<BR/>in my lifetime<BR/>I'll get to spend quality time<BR/>with my cousins<BR/>and I miss her so much <BR/>she's like my sister<BR/>please let me go visit her<BR/>I'll be safe I promise<BR/>this would mean so much<BR/>to me! <BR/>Please just let me go<BR/>just this onceamandahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07299352732804182564noreply@blogger.com